Nowadays many women are joining the police and military forces. however, some people believe that these jobs are not suitable for women discussed. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Undoubtedly, females play important roles in controlling of crime or defending against enemies in each country. Although some individuals think that women cannot become prosperous militants or members of police force, I personally think that their roles in these sectors are definitely crucial.
On the one hand, some believe that females must not be given equal opportunity to work in police force or army. One reason behind it is that women have less physical abilities than men. Having Estrogen hormones, they usually are less capable to achieve their goals in these kinds of jobs. For example, to jump from a two-storey building, men are more powerful than women physically, and to arrest criminals, they are not as successful as men. In addition, emotionally they are less fitted than the male ones to participate in missions. In many occasions, they might be sent to battle fields to fight against drug dealers, smugglers, or even escaped prisoners, but they might not tolerate difficult situations, like facing severe injured people or horrible accidental scenes. As a result, men have better potentials not only physically, but mentally to work as a militant or policeman.
On the other hand, I personally think that both genders must equally be given the same opportunity to have these kinds of jobs. One factor behind it is that have been better critical thinkers. Obviously, they have shown their roles to defend their country during war. As a prime example, British women officers were extremely prosperous to expose the Germans` schemes in World War II. Had not they been allowed to participate in the army plans, Europe would not have defeated Germany. Furthermore, to control crime, women must be hired in police force. Clearly, their roles are really important in those societies that males are restricted to touch females. In particular, in Iran, as a prime discipline, policemen are not permitted to touch the female offenders due to Islamic prohibitions; therefore, the government has given the green line to women to have equal opportunity to work in this kind of job.
In conclusion, while some may agree that females cannot become a perfect officer or army personnel, I completely disagree with them. From my point of view, because of some religious restrictions and specific abilities they have, governments must give similar fortune to women working as a militant or police officer.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 218, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are usually
...han men. Having Estrogen hormones, they usually are less capable to achieve their goals in ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'in particular', 'kind of', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241610738255 0.247107183377 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.152125279642 0.155533422707 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0872483221477 0.0946595960268 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0715883668904 0.0501214627716 143% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0447427293065 0.0437548338989 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118568232662 0.122226691241 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0380313199105 0.0403226058552 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75274757179 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0447427293065 0.0326793684256 137% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0604026845638 0.0861772015684 70% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0223713646532 0.021408717616 104% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00447427293065 0.011925033212 38% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2417.0 1933.35771543 125% => OK
No of words: 391.0 316.048096192 124% => OK
Chars per words: 6.18158567775 6.12580529183 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.20517956788 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.365728900256 0.374742101984 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.283887468031 0.28420135186 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.20716112532 0.203846283523 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.148337595908 0.137316102897 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75274757179 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.037074148 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552429667519 0.56093040696 98% => OK
Word variations: 62.970447019 60.7387585426 104% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0891783567 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5789473684 20.7743622355 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8729002846 49.517814964 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.210526316 127.492653851 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5789473684 20.7743622355 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.789473684211 0.814263465372 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 48.9676941715 49.1944974215 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.48333333333 1.69124875643 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202252171843 0.332605444948 61% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0817219673328 0.102741220458 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0439496539639 0.0668466124924 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.478552958514 0.534860350844 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.146607134788 0.148594505496 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077017227461 0.134430193775 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486116290513 0.0742795772207 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.28763767151 0.324371583561 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.148770051769 0.0638462369009 233% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13679313419 0.228012699653 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245019826308 0.058150111329 42% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 5.90881763527 85% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.4468937876 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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