People should look after their health for personal benefits, rather than a duty for a society. What extent do you agree or disagree?
It is claimed that taking care of people health according to people's benefits. People hold the view that because it is less responsible than a social duty. While I think the former view is well-founded to some extent, the later seems rather unresonable.
On the other hand, there are several reasons why people should take care of their health. Firstly, taking regular medical check-ups leads to early diagnosis of diseases, which helps increase the chance of diseases being cured. As a result, this extends life span. Secondly, investing money in alternative therapies helps people improve health and life quality. Furthermore, this encourages people to reduce stress and anxiety, which leads to a better work and study performance. For example, there are plenty advantages for people who has a good health that they can earn a lot of money for their family, which spends on wants and needs' life such as expensing on food and children's study. Thus, this enables people to increase a greater life.
However, I would argue taking care of people's health because of a social duty can cause more harm than good. Primarily, by looking after citizen's health, the government invests money in good quality of therapies. Therefore, this affects budget of citizen and becomes a burden for them. Secondarily, suffering on work makes people sleeping disorders, which is increasing the health risk and reducing the work performance. So, it can damage on people's lifestyle. For instance, the men have to go to military services when they are meet the demand of health and age, which prevents them from study and work. Ultimately this has a detrimental effect on people's life.
In conclusion, while I support the view that people have a huge of advantages when they are taking care of health, I disagree that it is a social duty.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03300330033 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5780753612 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547854785479 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.735946358 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7222222222 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8333333333 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5555555556 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265736750302 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080085472735 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526773510989 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155853736617 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040090754991 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.