At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with number of older people.Do the advantage of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with number of older people.
Do the advantage of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

The population of young masses are now very huge in all over the world. Some people say that it is advantageous, while others argue that having an equal number of young and old people are essential to maintaining the country. It is apparent that there would be more advantages compared to disadvantages due to aspects explained further.
On the one hand, having more young people than older one might be improve the economy of the territory. The young people doing hard work in any field because of they are very fit, energetic and healthier. For instance, working in factories, godown and more; where the loaded work has done by the young masses because only they can loading the burden and make it successful.
Moreover, another advantages of having young masses is to change the mindset which has followed by the citizenry about the nation, career and society. Because some old people are narrow minded and not too forwarded with latest trend.
On the other hand, we are not considered old people as a burden on the country. Because they have done their job for our nation and for their family. Having too much young people are not satisfactory for the territory. For example, india has huge number of young people who are an unemployeed, because india couldn't provide the enough jobs for people and the result is unemployment.
In conclusion, the advantages of this situation is more than disadvantages to having young people to improve and increase the growth of economy. But having citizenry are also beneficial to share their experience and knowledge and it might be motivate to the young masses to do best as per their knowledge.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 150, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
...ung people doing hard work in any field because of they are very fit, energetic and healthier. ...
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Line 2, column 331, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'load'
Suggestion: load
... the young masses because only they can loading the burden and make it successful. Mor...
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Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the latest'.
Suggestion: with the latest
...are narrow minded and not too forwarded with latest trend. On the other hand, we are not c...
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Line 4, column 308, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...e who are an unemployeed, because india couldnt provide the enough jobs for people and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1363.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8853046595 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57243816466 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501792114695 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4936729356 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3571428571 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9285714286 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15509052775 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059843585899 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402313772134 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990685402288 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451694922164 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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