At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

It is sometimes argued that preponderance of the population consists of adults whereas only minority of this consists of elderly. This essay states that the benefits of overwhelming amount of youngsters far outweigh its drawbacks because younger population is more aware of current situation in the Earth than older people. This essay will first discuss youngster's' great access to all media networks as the main benefit of being populated by those , followed by an analysis of the major drawback which is assumed lack of experience which elderly can bring.

One of the principle advantages of being inhabited by adults is an opportunity to be aware of current crucial problems via media sources . To put it differently , youngsters will know absolutely everything about parts of the world and will be aware of pertinent problems of these. Subsequently , the more conscious population will be the more efforts will be attached to fix apposite issues. For instance , having conduct scientific research , scientists have revealed that Kazakhstan , which currently is the most younger country in the world , has ameliorated the conditions of Aral sea and has reduced the amount of emissions from atomic stations in every part of the world.

The major disadvantage associated with experience that elderly can bring to younger generation. However , it is clear that with the advances of technology the ancient times will be forgotten as the assumed experience will not be beneficial to us as the new technological era has come , where our venerable elderly did not live. According to recent research at Oxford university , transferring an experience will not improve the lives of youngsters , the forecast made for 2030s years.

Overall , in my opinion , the benefits of having easily access to media sources outweigh disadvantages because on no account should the awareness be ignored in this scope.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, whereas, for instance, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34113712375 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93016361183 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565217391304 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.8211429478 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.181818182 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1818181818 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111473384222 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465420898286 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385283736073 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0716184557384 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342167755723 0.056905535591 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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