In recent years, the structure of a family and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?
It is true that these days the family structure has considerably changed, and the changing roles of men and women in the family has become increasingly similar. While this may have several benefits, I believe that the drawbacks are greater.
There have been some changes in modern families. Firstly, the size of family has been smaller than ever before. Today, people tend to live in a nuclear family with parents and children. This is contrast to large/extended families where several generations (live under the same roof) share the same accommodation. Secondly, the parental roles have changed significantly. In the past, fathers were breadwinners in a family, while mothers remained at home to take care of children. However, modern husbands tend to share household duties with their wives, and the wives also enter the labor market to find a job, contributing to the improvement of financial condition of family (and earns some money). This leads to a growing gender equality.
I believe that the potential drawbacks of these changes are more significant.On the positive side, living in a small family means the conflicts between generations can be avoided. Young people can lead their own lifestyle that they want without being complained by the others. For example, In many Vietnamese families, the old like home – cooked food and listen to solf music, whereas the young prefer to eat fast food and loud music. On the negative side, the transformation of families can result in child neglect. Many young parents have no time to take care their offspring due to their busy work, and they are likely to send their progenies to nursery school from an early age. Lack of parental interaction may have negative effects on the overall development of children.
In conclusion, I believe that the disadvantages of changes in the roles of family members and the family structure are more significant than its advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11746031746 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77804125582 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568253968254 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8078679573 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8235294118 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5294117647 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215425633638 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722184234366 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083944787357 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164144665187 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710662586877 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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