Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.
To derive a double benefit from anything is considered a bonus and this is especially the case when discussing leisure activities for children. The idea to fuse both education and entertainment into one activity is a goal of many educators, some would even believe that failure to do this makes the activity pointless. Drawing from examples in Sweden and reviewing games such as Pokemon, I firmly believe that all activities should have an educational value.
Leisure activities are a perfect time to take advantage of the receptiveness in a child’s mind, some countries are adamant about this. Take Sweden, for example, for various years they have legally stipulated that all children’s toys sold in the country should have some educational value. In addition, for such a rule to be passed it must be upheld by scientific research. Therefore the advantage of incorporating an education element into toys is scientifically proven.
On the other hand, across the UK children were wasting their time collecting and learning all the statistics of each creature on each Pokemon card. If however these cards had been inter wined with more educational data the child could have simultaneously gained a more practical education. Due to the child learning large swathes of irrelevant and useless information it can be argued that the time would have been better spent with real facts and figures on the cards.
To conclude, scientific evidence from Sweden and fantasy games such as Pokemon with little educational value are two clear reasons why children’s leisure activities should have an element of learning involved.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, for example, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29615384615 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95657676272 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592307692308 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5598056315 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.181818182 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6363636364 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27272727273 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20821616026 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814894068915 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462136381439 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127236535329 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490576895929 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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