Some folks think that children's achievement in adulthood is associated with the way they have been fostered by their parents. While i support the given idea, i also believe that people ought to consider other factors too. This essay will support my opinion with relevant examples.
It is well known that parents are seen as a child's role model and support since birth. However, not all parents are same because they are different individuals with different perspectives on how they raise their children. Firstly, with regard to authoritative parents, they not only set regular standards with limits but also encourage reasoning and discussing rules. So children also exhibit association towards higher performances, higher self-esteem and socially competent since these parents are found to be more responsive, supportive and warm. In contrast, there are permissive parents who neither show affection nor express interest in their kids. If children are raised by the neglecting parents, there is a high possibility that the children will become delinquents in the course of time. This ascertains why the acts of parents are instrumental for their children.
Having said that, there are other aspects which also tend to have a significant repercussion in the adulthood. Firstly, peers play an essential factor in child's prosperity. For instance, as peer relationships contribute to skills developing in area like communication, such as controlling their aggression, and team works, these kids are reported to be energetic, considerate and accepted. Secondly, the progress of a child is also determined by television that has been considered to be a crucial facet. Children generally mimic the behaviours that they view on television according to the study. For illustration, it can be positive when the program being viewed is one that teaches positive social behaviours, whereas violent images can result in aggressive imitations, exerting a negative impact on the advancement later in the life.
In conclusion, considering the direct influences on children's success, companions and television are as imperative as parent's roles.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
need to change this:
Having said that, there are other aspects which also tend to have a significant repercussion in the adulthood.
to:
However, other people believe that there are no direct connections between children's success in adulthood and how parents rise them.
if not, it is somehow out of topic.
also need to change this sentence: 'While i support the given idea, i also believe that people ought to consider other factors too.'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 328 350
No. of Characters: 1766 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.256 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.384 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.926 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.294 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.977 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.491 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.04 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...e been fostered by their parents. While i support the given idea, i also believe ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53353658537 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00503834057 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621951219512 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8104163822 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.764705882 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2941176471 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76470588235 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221632148142 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695089293902 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734748136296 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136353864947 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0823088666828 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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