Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.Discuss both these views and give your o

Some people believe that learning a second language is just for the sake of travelling or working for a oversea company. Others do not agree because learning a new language may involve to other factors. In my perspective, i fervently believe that being a bilingual could relate to more causes than just traveling or working abroad.

First of all, people want to learn a language, not their mother tongue, since they have a great passion for it. For example, watching Korean drama has promted my sister an enthusiasm to master this foreign language . She desires to fully understand the lines of the characters either sing along to the K-pop song. Besides, learning a new languge can help people easily get access to other cultures by reading books or watching news and of course, movies. Thus the desiration to learn a new language can derive from the close interest simulated by watching movies or songs of another country.

However, being multi lingual also offers more job opportunity and enhances the living standard. Nowadays, the international companies tend to employ people who know more than one language so they can negotiate with oversea business partners. And their ability of using the another language is crucial as it can either break or make a deal. On top of that, while travelling to another country, knowing foreign language, specifically English, breaks down the language barrier with the natives. Exchanging with them in English can help people avoid being ripped off or cheated by the local retaillers, or taxi drivers. Therefore, studying a foreign language is neccessary even when people want to apply for a job in an oversea company or travel abroad.

In conclusion, the reasons of mastering a new language are more than travelling and working purposes. And it is imperative for people to know a second language to adapt to the modern life.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, of course, first of all, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.038585209 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61329219655 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575562700965 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.2954477236 49.4020404114 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.9375 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4375 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9375 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248115720885 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082836604392 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588848081457 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157495287117 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224111214849 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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