Some people say that too much attention and too much many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree about this opinion?

Essay topics:

Some people say that too much attention and too much many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree about this opinion?

Over the past few decades, many researchers have studies how the government pay attention and allocate resources to protect animals and birds which are wild. Indeed, to my mind, there is now convincing evidence that wild animals are shield from danger is reasonable to some extend.

To embark upon, the more conservation of wild animals, the more money the government waste . There are a large amount of animals and birds in wild world such as the Amazon rainforest and Africa desert. Therefore, these animals lived during the history until now while to protect themselves against other animals. This means there is not negligible to government spending too much money. As a result, the government can spend its budget on alleviating the poverty and other situation. Foe example, irrespective of water contamination, the government can make contribution to solving the global warming which threat the life of human kind in recant years. In my view, there are critical needs to deal with that the public can concentrate on.

On the other hand, it is clear that most animals and birds wild are on the verge of extinction. that is to say, in spite of The government, people form campaigns to protect animals even if government can not afford. In other words, it is necessary to attend to these kind of animal adequately. This means that the government can divert resources to more urgent issues like medicines.

Taking everything into consideration, I would say that protecting wild animals and birds is important not as much as other problems. So it is better the government improve the people’s awareness of the habitat of flora and fauna.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, while, kind of, such as, as a result, in my view, in other words, in spite of, on the other hand, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05128205128 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76907264859 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564102564103 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.8717116851 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.9333333333 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228990055626 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755641682903 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066062943685 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148079398844 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252712010496 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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