Some people think that children should aim to their best at what they doing. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?
There is a controversial topic of whether or not children should be encouraged to accomplish any task perfectly in their lives. While it is important to create a colorful world for children by being entertained and be comfortable with their daily activities, I hold the view that aiming to their best in everything would be a good habit for their future.
To begin with, it is understandable when children have flexible thoughts and targets in different subjects. Firstly, since they still stay at an early age, entertainment, joy, and excitement are necessary for their cognitive development. If these children put heavily on targets and undergo unnecessary pressure, they are easily prone to mental and physical illnesses such as anxiety disorder or depression. Secondly, every child possesses their own capacities and abilities, it might become a burden when asking them perfectly in all tasks or topics. For example, Math is out of my innate abilities, keeping to complete everything following a standard quality might be impossible to me.
However, creating a habit of focusing on one’s responsibilities would help people reach their success easier. The initial reason is that when making an endless effort on small things, children could rationalize and produce a good performance in their huge ambitions. As a result, possessing a fruitful life in the future could reinforce their happiness and wealth. Furthermore, having an impeccable completion would not affect adversely others just because of a person’s carelessness and irresponsibility. For example, sweeping the floor is my niece’s task, however, she still leaves it dirty and messy. This means other family members have to do it again, which makes them have unwanted consequences in huge tasks in the future.
In conclusion, I am inclined to the view of doing one’s best when being responsible for some things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
There is a controversial topic of whether or not children should be encouraged to accomp...
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Line 3, column 602, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'keeping completing'.
Suggestion: keeping completing
...le, Math is out of my innate abilities, keeping to complete everything following a standard quality...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34113712375 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04816427812 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628762541806 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1074318064 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.071428571 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3571428571 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0714285714 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196226155933 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607706650297 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416931756935 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12209642243 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275118781155 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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