Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement. Give the reason and relevant examples

Essay topics:

Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement. Give the reason and relevant examples

In recent times, extreme sports have been in the limelight and have aroused the wide concern for the pernicious effects associated with it. Although some people are of the fervent conviction that it is necessary to prohibit extreme sports, I would argue that the benefits of this kind of sports overweight the detrimental effects.
Those in favor of extreme sports banning tend to focus on the life threatening. It is obvious that many dangerous sports such as base jumping or cave diving not only threat the player’s life but also cause the serious physical injuries. In such cases, it is a huge loss to person’s families who die in such accidents, and many have to live the rest of their life with the permanent disability. Moreover, children are exposed too many television programs showing the dangerous sports, which encourages them to try this at home without instructions. It leads to inevitable accidents for them. As a result, a percentage of people assume that we should discourage dangerous sports.
However, there are several reasons why extreme sports are proven to bring enormous merits for both the government and the citizens. First of all, numerous companies hold the extreme sports championships like Formula 1 attracting many tourists from over the world, which boosts the economic development. Indeed, the huge profits from the tourism provide budgets to the government, thus they can spend them to improve the quality of life of the whole community. Secondly, the dangerous sports challenge the human’s limits, inspiring people to be brave, confident and adventurous. These ideas irrefutably raise doubts over the need for dangerous sports prohibition and substantiate the vital role of this kind of sports.
In conclusion, while the notion of the abandon of extreme sports is worthwhile in the views of some people, there are more convincing reasons why dangerous sports product remarkable effects on both the government and the citizens.

Votes
Average: 7.9 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 439, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun television seems to be countable; consider using: 'many televisions'.
Suggestion: many televisions
...ity. Moreover, children are exposed too many television programs showing the dangerous sports, ...
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Line 4, column 157, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...e more convincing reasons why dangerous sports product remarkable effects on both the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26898734177 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81622634538 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579113924051 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8685455338 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.928571429 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.57142857143 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169851298641 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059940331323 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453393135743 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10906147404 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0147974837645 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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