Some people think it is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment for people who are already ill To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some people argue that spending public funds on encouraging a healthy lifestyle to avoid sickness is more crucial than spending it on treating people who are already sick. In my opinion, I agree with this idea for the following reason.

To begin with, an unhealthy lifestyle is widely regarded as the leading cause of fatal diseases. People who smoke, for example, are more likely to develop lung cancer than those who do not smoke. Hence, the government's budget spending on educating people about how to lead a healthy lifestyle may bring some advantages to society. Through educational programs on television and social media, people would gain awareness about protecting their health. For instance, people who read or watch the news on social media about health may stop eating junk food and change to eating organic food instead.

Furthermore, there is no denying that prevention is preferable to cure. Firstly, motivating citizens to adopt a positive lifestyle is more cost-effective compared to treating patients. For example, a promotion project that prevents a large number of people from becoming ill is likely to be less expensive than caring for a large number of sick people who require sophisticated treatment such as radiotherapy or surgery. This investment will help people reduce their financial hardships.

In conclusion, promoting a healthy lifestyle is preferable to treating patients. Not only does improving physical health prevent illness, but it also has financial benefits. As a result, I strongly advocate that more funds be directed toward encouraging a healthier way of life rather than patient care.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (2 votes)

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Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34496124031 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79119558435 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62015503876 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0895367744 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8571428571 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38892644378 0.244688304435 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109320768517 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0969571739578 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225816741015 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090930488476 0.056905535591 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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