some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Essay topics:

some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.
Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays competition is seen crucial for success. Many companies want their employees have sense of competition as well as co-operation. So ignoring any of these topics is none sense, and these qualifications must be built when the children are in small ages.

Excessive sense of competition usually decreases the success. However, using it in a proper way may increase the success in high rates so the parents have to be more careful while educating their children about sense of competition. But it should be taught in a correct way because it may be resulted in childrens rejection for the education.

On the other hand co-operating is crucial too for success. Variety is important for a better view so another person might has a better view than the others. This is the reason why children should be taught co-operation as well. However, there are some cons and pros of it too as well as excessive sense of competition. If you teach your children only co-operation rather than teaching both co-operation and sense of competition eventually your child will lose his or her self confidence and would not able to complete a task by him or herself.

I believe that I will teach my children both sense of competition and co-operating in a balanced way. It is crucial that a child should complete a task by him/herself as well as with a group. Nevertheless there will not be her/his parents beside him/her whenever he/she needs help. This is the reason why these things should be taught equally.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...of competition. But it should be taught in a correct way because it may be resulted in childrens...
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...by him/herself as well as with a group. Nevertheless there will not be her/his parents besid...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, well, while, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1250.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90196078431 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84986088007 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 383.4 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4640179121 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3333333333 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351401186663 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116814218163 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765270969296 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213510656635 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531939413923 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 78.4519038076 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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