Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught.

Essay topics:

Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught.

The topic of what to teach school-goers has raised interesting viewpoints. One of which suggests that the emphasis should be on academic training for students to succeed in exams and that skills such as cooking and dressing are not necessary. While acknowledging the importance of exam-oriented education, I disagree with the neglect of practical skills as they bring various benefits.

Focusing on academic knowledge is of value for several reasons. Forefront among these is that students get better preparation for demanding university entrance exams. For instance, candidates for medical schools often strive to achieve combined marks of at least 25 out 30 for their qualifying tests, which is difficult to achieve without intensive training. Efforts to pass exams are also justified by the prospect of future career opportunities. It has been shown that graduates of top-ranking colleges tend to have higher success quotients applying for high-paid positions.

However, there are compelling arguments in support of teaching practical skills. For young students, learning these skills not only fosters a sense of independence and responsibility but also forms a healthy lifestyle. As an example, students can actively prepare nutritious meals instead of relying on unhealthy meals of instant noodles and processed foods to get by. Also, the psychological benefits of joining classes that are not academically intensive have often gone unnoticed. To illustrate this, learning how to dress properly or handle food ingredients could allow students to release stress, which could elevate their academic performance later on.

In conclusion, taking both sets of arguments into consideration, I believe that even though exam-focused lesson are crucial, teaching students culinary or dressing skills is beneficial and thus, should not be overlooked.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 222, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ial and thus, should not be overlooked.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, thus, while, at least, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72924187726 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02022618626 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.667870036101 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2036773834 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.357142857 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222927989715 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666843281649 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0881074143258 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139537880233 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742940992891 0.056905535591 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.95 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.99 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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