Task 2: Research shows that business meetings, discussions and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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Task 2: Research shows that business meetings, discussions and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

Thanks to the advance in technology, the business activities such as meeting, discussion and training can be done using digital technology. In my point of view, this will bring significant advantages that I will outline in this essay.

Regarding the benefits, we should not ignore various merits that technology devices such as a computer can bring to the business world. First of all, by employing technology gadgets the workers can manage their time-table effectively as they could perform their job everywhere. The working mothers, for instance, they can do their job responsibility at home while taking care of their households. This will cut the employees' stress due to their family reasons, and it can increase their job productivity. Furthermore, for multi-national companies having several branches around the world, to conduct face-to-face meetings require much time and financial budget. By using technological tools, business conferences can be delivered digitally. As a result, the companies could minimize their financial expenditure as well as have an effective meeting.

However, we should not ignore various drawbacks that the digitalized business interaction could be caused. Firstly, not all-region in the world has a high-speed internet connection. For developing countries such as Indonesia, many regions are covered by a minimum internet signal. If the face call meeting is interrupted by poor internet connection, this will lead to miscommunication or event implemented wrong policy. Moreover, providing online training for the employees will be less effective as the trainer and the training participants have indirect interaction. Some participants will need direct guidance to fully understand what they learn about, and this will not be achieved by using a video tut­­orial. As a result, the training program will not improve the skill of the participants.

To sum up, although there are drawbacks of using the online method to conduct business activities, nevertheless, I believe that the benefits resulted from this way is greater.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, regarding, so, well, while, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61464968153 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13164867391 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585987261146 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.9865736728 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.705882353 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4705882353 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.70588235294 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0906110006663 0.244688304435 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0311091816882 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358242371484 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0663035106791 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265736593388 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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