There are many zoos in the world. What are the benefits and drawbacks of keeping animals in zoos.

Essay topics:

There are many zoos in the world. What are the benefits and drawbacks of keeping animals in zoos.

It is true that more and more zoos have been erecting all over the world in many recent years, resusting in vigorous debate whether this is the positive tendency. In my opinion, while offering numerous evident benefits, drawbacks could overshadow in the long run.

On the one hand, there are two main advantages stemming from opening more zoos. Firstly, more profit could be generated, meaning that this amount of money would be donated partially in organisations which play an important role in protecting animals such as PETA, the largest organisation in the world. Therefore, the more money patronized from zoo activities, the more efficiency these organisations could operate. Secondly, it is fair to say that zoo could draw residents attention. It means that authorities, consequently, could make the most of this to teach inhabitants how to preserve and appreciate nature. As a result, thanks to zoo activities, humankind would an deeper insights into animal kingdom and be willing to be involved more in animal protection activities.

On the other hand, I would argue that these above-mentioned benefits could be overshadowed by the tangible and severe drawbacks, which negatively affect on not only animal behaviours, but also fall them prey to mental diseases. It is evident that zoos would, inevitably, preclude animal natural behaviour patterns, giving rise to many underlying repercussions. Overdependence, for instance, could be the major problem of such captive animals. They have been acclimatized to convenient life which they enjoy in zoos so that they have almost lost all survival skills when it comes to living in natural habitats. Additionally, it is wrong to say that zoos are ideal places to provide shelters for extinct species due to the fact that a majority of zoos have been exploiting other animals, which are not endangered, just because of profit. Such captive-bred species, as a consequence, would suffer from psychological problems or even self-destructive behaviours like bar-bitting and self-mutilation if they live in such cages without freedom.

In conclusion, it seems to me that capturing animals in zoos could bring various disadvantages, which would overshadow these benefits.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41498559078 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09679891597 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599423631124 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.48720479 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.266666667 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1333333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193143202262 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626002993696 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440441007963 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115399655624 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0142496326364 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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