28/10/2017
Some people believe that modern designs for schools and offices with more open spaces are necessary. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such spaces? Give your opinion.
Many aver creating offices and schools with an open space design is a necessity. Below some merits and drawbacks of the trend as well as author’s opinion will be given.
On the one hand, using a design without walls has some benefits. Firstly, productivity increases because people are encouraged to cooperate and interact more by the absence of barriers. In fact, some researches demonstrate staff of companies that work in an open space design is on twenty-four percent more successful at doing their assignments than those who are exploited in classic offices. Secondly, the atmosphere of freedom and liberty is often associated with the discussed style. To exemplify, pupils that are taught in classrooms without walls easily tell educators about their problems and issues, and employees that work in spacious premises freely speak up about ways to improve their work to management. So, those are several advantages of the proposal.
On the other hand, the blind implementation of the policy has some shortages. Primarily, working in open space premises may be challenging because of noise. To illustrate, often a large number of children are studying at school simultaneously and while a part of pupils is discussing homework or a piece of literature, other kids are having a formal examination and they are being distracted by the voices of their peers working nearby. The same situation may be observed at workplaces as well. Furthermore, not all folks have the same personal characteristics and some people may struggle to interact with co-workers or peers all the time. In fact, about thirty-eight percent of the total population are introverts who prefer to avoid having a deal with other too frequently. Thus, the fulfillment of the idea could have some adverse effects on studying and working processes.
In my opinion, spacious offices and classrooms possess many advantages and should be used but making this design ubiquitous appears to be a mistake because of the issues discussed above.
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pupils that are taught
pupils who are taught
and employees that work in spacious premises
and employees who work in spacious premises
flaws:
It is out of topic. 'with more open spaces' doesn't mean 'completely open space'.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 323 350
No. of Characters: 1647 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.239 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.099 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.817 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.188 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.608 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.812 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.486 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.029 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
advantages of more open
advantages of more open spaces like: more environment-friendly , less crowded, more air, more furniture....
disadvantages of more open spaces like: more budget to build, more money to maintain...
Am I asked what are
Am I asked what are advantages and disadvantages of open space design? I actually have a little idea about this style.
No, the topic is about
No, the topic is about advantages and disadvantages of more open spaces. it is about lifestyle not design.
Dear SIr,
Dear SIr,
Please help me with analysis.
Some people believe that modern designs for schools and offices with more open spaces are necessary.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of such spaces?
Give your opinion.
Analysis:
1) merits and shortages of open spaces for studying and working.
What is "open space in a building?" it is a big area without walls and limitations.
the first para of a body: advantages
-good for productivity-all work is done in front of others, no way to be lazy and play angry birds.
-allows save money on electricity bills because light from windows makes working for many people convenient, no need to install elaborate an air conditioning system.
the second para of a body: DISadvatages.
- psychological discomfort-feeling of being exposed to others, necessity interact with others.
- open spaces must be well-design so, high expenditures on the project and design, expensive to renovate.
Is this plan on the topic?
No, open area in school or
No, open area in school or office doesn't mean 'a big area without walls and limitations'. for example, it doesn't mean yards or playgrounds in schools. open areas are inside the buildings.
search google images: 'open spaces offices' or ' open spaces school' and you will see open area images.
This topic mostly is not from actual IELTS exam topics, since it may confuse people. so better not put more time on it.
Ok. Understood.
Ok. Understood.
Dear Sir,
I would like to practice a little bit at analyzing topics. May I do it here? or should i use the forum?(you said it is not active)
i may write a lot of essays and check whether my understanding is correct but it appears to be inefficient.
Please, let me discussed several topics with you.
Thank you.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... because of noise. To illustrate, often a large number of children are studying at school simulta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, in fact, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25386996904 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91769673067 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557275541796 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.5199158653 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0625 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1875 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5625 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163585863892 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556982734152 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668747482621 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117006114098 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532604017816 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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