Being a celebrity – such as a famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Being famous is a dream of everyone, because of the addtention one desires from others. However, becoming well-know also means to expose privacy to the public, which brings benefit, as well as problem. Personally, I think advantage of being a celebrity overweighs its disadvantage.

To start with, one problem engendered along with fame is that public exaggratly criticise celebrities' negative behavior due to the focus from media. The media normally reports gossips concerning celebrities. If the news related to a celebrity is morally wrong, readers will excessivelly criticize the celebrity, even though the behavior did not violate the laws. Once a Chinese actor and singer accidently divulged numerous nude photograph of another actress, the public attacted both for their inapproprite relationship and corruptive life. As a matter of fact, personal pictures ought to be regarded as private and the society should leave them alone.

Nonetheless, fame does not always generate problem, rather it also induce benefits. One excellent example is that enterprises always hire celebrities, film stars or famous athletes, to shoot advertisements. With the popularity, celebrities can earn a magnitude of money from advertisements made for companies. Besides, companies friquently sponsor celebrities for their expense, such as travel, accommondation and garments, in public activities. In this way, celebrity increases popularity with advertisement, which brings more popularity in return.

To summarize, being famous will lose privacy in the light of media, which is one problemetic issue; Nevertheless, which also brings benefits from popularity, advertisement for example. In my opinion, I deem that being a celebrity brings more benefits than problems.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'induces'?
Suggestion: induces
...always generate problem, rather it also induce benefits. One excellent example is that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, well, for example, i think, such as, as a matter of fact, as well as, in my opinion, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.79230769231 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14044055252 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.653846153846 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2311100207 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.4 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4666666667 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369287151726 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108654782124 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838007289927 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225935304412 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767626444854 0.056905535591 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.84 50.2224549098 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.01 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.13 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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