Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns as it increases the crime and violence in the society TO what extent do you agree or disagree give your own opinion

Essay topics:

Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns as it increases the crime and violence in the society. TO what extent do you agree or disagree,give your own opinion?

It is sometimes argued that inspite of the severe punishments in developed ountries, the number of criminal acts have been on the increase in the ecent years. While a group of people believe that gun carrying should be anned in order to diminishing the crime level, I would argue that I agree with this scheme to a certain extentbut I also believe that it can be used by especial organizations such as police and military service.

There are various reasons why I would discuss that carrying a weapon should be banned in countries. Firstly, it can increase the number of suicides in each society especially in developing countries that people lack the avarage social welfare and are influenced by economic pressures. Secondly, juveniles are more likely to become delinquents in a society in which accessing the weapons is easy and families are always worried about the children's upbringing and their safety. Finally, the number of violant
acts, aggressiveness and savagory will boost. TO support my claim, I can refer to an article having been published in Times magazine,indicates that the number of offenders who commit a crime in specific states of USA in which carrying a gun was legal, was twice more than other states.

On the other hand, gun plays an important role in some careers such as army and police and it is an indispensable element in their work since they can protect themselves against offenders and act oppose criminals. Furthermore, soldiers who are trained to protect the borders of each country should be provided with guns and other war equipment. Besides, it can be an effective tool to threat criminals and cease them from re-offending a crime and controlling the social behaviors such as demonstrations. One particularly salient example of this is the France police who could decrease the criminal acts up to 30%.

In conclusion, in spite of the advantages of carrying a gun in each society, the detrimental effects of it should not be neglected and government authorities should ban the gun usage for ordinary people.

Votes
Average: 8.6 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , indicates
... having been published in Times magazine,indicates that the number of offenders who commit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, such as, in spite of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03519061584 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89804923729 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560117302053 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.1161370136 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.083333333 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4166666667 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0833333333 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180275011211 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640243883299 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624393553565 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108912279664 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544466809417 0.056905535591 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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