In many countries people have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy ways What do you think the reasons for this and how can it be solved Give relevant examples from your experience

These days an unhealthy lifestyle is a most common cause of diseases which occur in many people.
The aim of the following essay is to understand what the issue stems from and describe how we can eradicate this issue.
Looking at the roots of the increasing number of people who prefer an unhealthy lifestyle, the lack of laws prohibiting agitation and sale of fast food may be seen as the primary obstacle to maintaining a healthy lifestyle. Nowadays, vice versa, every day a promotion of fast foods by TV and advertising of less healthy products on each step in the street affects people in a bad way. For example, according to statistical data, after seeing the promotion about fast food, automatically, the desire of people is becoming higher and often they order this product by courier, increasing the income of owners up to 50%. In addition, particularly, citizens of big towns have health problems, due to the lack of enough activities in their everyday life. Because there are many jobs which one should do at the office, behind the computer. Therefore this trend may cause obesity, heart diseases and diabetes.
Considering the ways to combat the problem, one of the viable solutions is introduction of laws banning promotion of fast food on TV, social media and billboard, and also should restrict the selling of fast foods in supermarkets, shopping centers and on the street.The sale of these kind of foods allow only restaurant with expensive price. In addition, the employers should organize a special place with equipment and separate time for the gym at least 30minutes every day. This method helps to be in good shape, predict the most common diseases such as diabetes, heart attack and obesity.
To sum up, the problem is mainly associated with growing rates of promoting fast foods among the population and increasing the number of jobs behind computers. Thus the problem should be addressed by introducing a law banning the promotion and sale of fast foods and using gyms at the office during work time.

Votes
Average: 9.2 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, at least, for example, in addition, kind of, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95307917889 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67497230249 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577712609971 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.6492293622 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.923076923 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2307692308 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153119437194 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553937140371 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310891342541 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0860754695902 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04262614401 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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