Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

In the modern world, there are a number of crimes happen around the world. Which it has been committed by human. Consequently, They will be imprisoned in jail for a period. So, there have been recorded different cases. That people who committed crimes against human or other types of offensive conditions such race issue, killing, robbery. After realsing them, they will become more offensive. So here details and how it can be resolved.

First of all, criminals are everywhere in the world. It can not be tackled easily. As it takes time to decrease it. In addition, it needs to be studied carefully with hard work. We somtimes feel. That punishment is not a good technique to solve problems. As Criminals require a kind of support and cooperation to direct through the correct path, they need to be treated proffesionally with their cases. When they get prisoned for over a period with regards to their committed crimes, they may be mixed with other criminals who have bad thoughts about life. So the possibly of breaking rules would be increase, it means that Government did not solve any issues. Instead of correction, they might be destroyed. Hence, they will have mutual passive thoughts bewteen each other. For example, there is a study in Germany. It shows, while it was taken disciplinary action against like punishment for offenders, the percentage of building passive mentalities will increase dramatically due to experienced criminal who are in the prisoned.

However, government should use proper methods instead of punishment. They must deal ethically. As a restult they still human. On other words. For example, segregating as per crime rate. It can encourage to learn sorts of jobs, while they are at the prison. Furthermore, educating them with different courses. To be more specific, once they learn such a proffessional work, after they got released, they will look for job. So keeping them busy with thinking about work and how to learn new skills, it will take them away from doing bad deeds. Moreover, it can provide to put them on rehabilitation cells. So that they can spend years in it, while they are in it. They will have the ability to be taught other fields related to market jobs.

To conclude, crimes can be tackled, if we convert punishment to something positive. Offering for them opportunities to learn new skills. In addition, they can give them the chance to correct themselves instead of wasting years in jails. Besides, they can have benefits while they are out of prison. However, neglecting them will increase crimes in countries.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mber of crimes happen around the world. Which it has been committed by human. Consequ...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he world. It can not be tackled easily. As it takes time to decrease it. In additi...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...f punishment. They must deal ethically. As a restult they still human. On other wo...
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Message: Did you mean 'learning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: learning
...ing as per crime rate. It can encourage to learn sorts of jobs, while they are at the pr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, while, for example, in addition, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 7.85571142285 293% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2278.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 454.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01762114537 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67055201888 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 176.041082164 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539647577093 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 506.74238477 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 5.43587174349 386% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 2.10420841683 523% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 39.0 16.0721442886 243% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 11.0 20.2975951904 54% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7424317449 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 58.4102564103 106.682146367 55% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.641025641 20.7667163134 56% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.82051282051 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 3.9879759519 451% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 3.4128256513 352% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251336887712 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647245317688 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127066754292 0.0667982634062 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275273230324 0.151304729494 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.362863182629 0.056905535591 638% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 13.0946893788 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 50.2224549098 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.65 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.0 9.78957915832 41% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.1190380762 63% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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