The money given to help poor countries does not solve the problem of poverty, so rich countries should give other types of help instead.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the number of developing countries who does not access the minimum social welfare is on the increase all over the globe. While some nations try to help these poor countries by sending them money, medical equipment and educational facilities, there are a group of government authorities who are against this scheme. I agree with the idea of helping developing countries to a certain point; however, I also believe that other nations should take steps to eradicate poverty in these countries.
There are various reasons why I would argue that giving money to developing countries is a positive scheme. Firstly, some of these countries even do not access fresh water resources and they drink unhealthy beverages which has detrimental effects on the social health. Secondly, children become part of workforce in these countries and they have to leave education in order to earn money. To support my claim, I can refer to an article having been published in Times magazine, indicates that in 2008 the number of pupils who dropped out of the school has increased up to 30% in developing countries such as Africa and India. Finally, it is true that developed countries cannot eradicate poverty in poor countries by giving them money, this amount of money can boost the health care and education system and provide a better social welfare.
On the other hand, it is a fact that poverty is the result of unemployment and lack of education in each society which can cause some more serious difficulties such as embezzlement, smuggling and juvenile delinquency. Developed countries can help the poor
countries by investing money in various industries such as aviation, tourism and food. Consequently, this will bring income for local people and the government and will motivate more nations to invest in these areas. Furthermore, the workforce in developing countries is much cheaper and it benefits both, the host country and the developed country who emalgamates and sign contracts to work together. Take for example, the Iraque who could boost the economy of the coutry about 20% by the help of china and UAE.
In conclusion, although giving money to poor countries cannot be a good soloution to tackle the poverty, it can increase the quality of life. I believe that developed countries can help the needy nations by investing money in deferent industries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 388.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11597938144 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71252938329 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512886597938 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.5028103646 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.333333333 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8666666667 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0666666667 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278062698882 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109181550395 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640649586407 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173948951956 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421862628861 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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