Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other parts of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What are the problems of this? Suggest some solution to solve the problem?

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Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other parts of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What are the problems of this? Suggest some solution to solve the problem?

In recent times, the balance between work and other parts of lives is the most complicated to a great number of people. Not many could do this balance. This essay will give an insight into this situation and gives my personal perspective

To the ways of my thinking, the main reason causes this problem is the development of society. It creates more things to do, more relationships to keep up and more worries to solve.

First and foremost, the disproportion between work and other aspects of lives leaves people no time to taking care of themselves. Therefore, this issue has bad impacts on their physical and mental health, which causes most of the diseases in daily life. For instance, there are many suicide cases that happen every hour in Japan and Korea because they have to suffer too much pressure from work and society

From the second point of view, Lack of proportion has bad effects on relationships. For instance, Busy parents usually have to sacrifice the time that they should have spent on taking care of their children and tighten the bond between family members. The children without parental care would always feel inferiority complex and lonely. Therefore, they would get bad manners and easily get into social issues.

To solve these problems, people should sketch out a flexible schedule for their life and figure out the most important things in their life to focus on.

In conclusion, Find out the way to balance between work and other parts of lives is complex, but there always have a solution for this issue if we try to solve it smart

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1319.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88518518519 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40155699381 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57037037037 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4749693305 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.916666667 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274164136056 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0963785552073 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906624654532 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140957484614 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102168888326 0.056905535591 180% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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