Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other parts of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What are the problems of this? Suggest some solution to solve the problem?

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Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other parts of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What are the problems of this? Suggest some solution to solve the problem?

In recent times, the balance between work and other part of lives is the most complicated to a great number of people. Not many could do this balance. This essay will give an insight into this situation and gives my personal perspective

To the ways of my thinking, the main reason causes this problem is the development of society. It creates more things to do, more relationship to keep up and more worries to solve.

First and foremost, the disproportion between work and other aspects of lives leaves people no time to taking care of themselves .Therefore, this issue has bad impacts on their physical and mental health, which causes most of the diseases in daily life. For instance, there are many suicide cases that happen every hour in Japan and Korea because they have to suffer too much pressure from work and society

At the second point of view, Lack of proportion has bad effects on relationships. For instance, Busy parents usually have to sacrifice the time that they should have spent for taking care of their children and tighten the bond between family members. The children without parental care would always feel inferiority complex and lonely. Therefore, they would get bad manners and easily get into social issues.

To solve these problems, people should sketch out a flexible schedule for their life and figure out the most important things in their life to focus on.

In conclusion, Find out the way to balance between work and other parts of lives is complex, but there always have a solution for this issue if we try to solve it smart

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1162.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 237.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9029535865 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47204815771 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57805907173 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7469946962 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8333333333 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272472704069 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916315939734 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0946938999066 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139297966766 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10478104836 0.056905535591 184% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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