the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000.

Essay topics:

the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000.

The given pie charts illustrate a large discrepancy between the percentage of fuel source which is an electricity production in two different countries Australia and France from 1980 to 2000.
Overall, Australia in 2000 was accounted for the highest of total electricity production in comparison with the others. Besides, there was vast change in the units of electricity by fuel source over the given period.
In Australia, not only the total production in 2000 constitute 170 units of electricity, but it also was higher than that of 1980, which stood at 100 units. Moreover, in 1980, the percentage of coal was 50%, which was the highest comparing to the others, then dramatically increased to 130% in 2000. In addition, the proportion of the hydro power gradually rose from 20% in 1980 to 36% in 2000. While, there was a sharply decrease in the most figures in 2000.
In France, there was a fluctuation of 25% in the figure of coal over the 20-year period, while, the percentage of nuclear power was seen in the significant growth of 111%. Additionally, the year 2000 experienced a marginal development of 5% in the percentage of oil. Meanwhile, that of hydro power and natural gas was vanished in 2000.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, moreover, so, then, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 3.0 24.0651302605 12% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1008.0 1615.20841683 62% => OK
No of words: 205.0 315.596192385 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91707317073 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85755414733 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 176.041082164 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526829268293 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 295.2 506.74238477 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4590159073 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.8 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325427610239 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133390959703 0.084324248473 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119275477572 0.0667982634062 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232817153924 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141367845217 0.056905535591 248% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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