At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

Currently, there are countries which have more young inhabitants than old citizens. There is an argument whether there are more pros than cons about this situation. In my opinion, the drawbacks of this circumstances exceed the benefits because of some reasons.

On the one hand, younger generations are more capable in using technology. As the time goes, technology advancement becomes more massive and affects a lot of aspects in our daily life, including jobs. With younger generations' capability in utilizing technology, it will be easier to produce more productive results in the workplace. For example, a lot of grocery shops with younger owners have used computer to record transactions while older owners still record transactions manually. As a consequence, younger owners can work faster and become more productive than the older owners

On the other hand, young adults tend to be lazier than the older generations. This is because they did not live in era where wars were still existed and many countries were struggling for their independence. As a result, this attitude also affects their working attitude, where they will struggle less than older people, and become less productive in the workplace. For example, older employees have been used to work hard without being paid with incentives, but nowadays younger employees tend to work lazily even though they have received a relatively big wage.

In conclusion, the downside of the situation where the number of younger generations is larger than the older generations exceed its benefit because even though young adults are more capable in using technology and can become more productive in the workplace, their working ethic is worse than older generations where they tend to work lazily and nonproductive.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...uation. In my opinion, the drawbacks of this circumstances exceed the benefits becau...
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Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
...aily life, including jobs. With younger generations capability in utilizing technology, it ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32269503546 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77071104524 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503546099291 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.757199579 49.4020404114 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.083333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129396006283 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502294880972 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.023283693315 0.0667982634062 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0840285505944 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170284854206 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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