In some countries young people are encouraged to work, or to travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantage and disadvantage for young people who decided to do this.
Before embarking their journey to universities after high schools, these students are often encouraged to get employed or wander for a year. This essay believes that financial independence along with work experience and exposure to the real-world are the pros, whereas influence of money and drugs could be the major drawbacks.
First and foremost, a year after intermediate could be utilized to gain work experience. This is because most of the universities’ approach are towards professional degree and a year of work experience could also bring monitory support, which could eventually help them in their college. For example, recent studies in the University of California suggests, students with work experience and financial support performs better specifically in STEM courses. Secondly, these students are also encouraged to travel, this will only acquaint them about various aspect of world. For example, a research in Yale university claims travelling has been a key factor for students to develop their creativity.
However, the major disadvantage of break after high-school, and employment in this period could only increase their chances of not returning to academia. It means that once a student starts earning, the sense of financial independence discourages them to return to universities for degree, this is because since their childhood days students are advised to perform better in school in order to find a suitable job. But once getting employed students finds studies troublesome. Additionally, travelling could bring these adolescents in the dark-world of drugs, often at this vulnerable age the addiction of these hazardous products is common. For instance, a recent data published by the New York police department suggests that young adults are more affected by drug abuse, specifically those who are not living with their family.
To conclude, financial independence along with some experience could be good factor to work, as well as travelling could bring out the spark of creativity, but this could also go against the students discouraging them to join college or could be prone to drugs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, for example, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45757575758 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96802828814 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551515151515 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.0160363614 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.538461538 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206873940401 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803074943189 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414304742318 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131200395015 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466050029259 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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