Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys

It is commonplace these days for parents to buy many toys for their children. Some experts claim that this action can lead to negative consequences, while other highlight the positive aspects of rearding children with toys. In this essay I will analyze those two opposite points of view trying to underline the most important issues.

People who believe that having a bunch of toys is something good for children, point out that those tools are a valid and effective support to help children develop their imagination and other creative skills, like music, drawing, painting or building. Furthermore, children have the opportunity to invest their spare time in doing something relaxing and inspiring. For example, children can cultivate a passion for construction mechanic or engineering by playing with Lego Technic. In addtion to this positive aspects, we should take also into account that parents have the possibility to mind their own businesses like doing the ironing or doing the washing up, knowing that their children are safely playing in their rooms.

On the other hand, there are other people who think that parents should not pamper their offspring by buying them an exaggerate number of toys. First of all, they point out that giving too many presents can make children extremely greedy, demanding more and more until the situation will reach a point of no return, with parents unable to say no anymore. Secondly, it can create wrong expectations in children, who might be lead to take everything for granted, which is basically the opposite of how the real world goes. Parents should instead teach children to take responsibility and to be activ when it comes to getting something.

Summing up, from my point of view I would lean to those parents who decide not to whelm children with toys since this can have a negative effect on their behaviour in the future and transmit a distorted image of the world that they will have to face in the future.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, second, secondly, so, while, for example, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99392097264 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53810130272 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55623100304 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.3615763777 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.916666667 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4166666667 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295198239682 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113075143117 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749818328175 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181450956409 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381169696567 0.056905535591 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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