Some people think that the government should give money to creative people, such as artists and musicians. To what extent do you agree?

Essay topics: Some people think that the government should give money to creative people, such as artists and musicians. To what extent do you agree?

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There are a certain number of people believe that government should invest money to art, therefore, i disagree with this statement. I will come with details as following;

On the first hand, government should have make a balance between arts and other parts . As it should classify things as per the importance. For example, science is the most inportant field that conutry should take care about. Creating methods by using science field to helps us to improve the enviroment of the country. It was mentioned that there are scientists, they have come with inventing devices which it can support to clear air pollution which it results from fossil fuel. Unfortunately, their ideas have not been supported to invent it. However, government must have set an eye for them because they can be counted as creative people as well. So keeping a proportion of money to be invested for them is a good idea. So it has to work to adopt their inventions for the future for getting better situation and enviroment. In addition, if it did not work on them to take them as advantage, undoudtedly, their thoughts and ideas would be burried forever. As a consequence, there will be a reason for leaving the origin country. As a result, the country will lose them as well. However, government should make a balance, not by giving attention only on art and ignoring other important sides.

On the second hand, arts are also an essential area, so making another proportion of money investment to this domain, it would motivate artists and musicians to do something for the country, As they can be counted as talents people. In addition, arts play an integral role in reflecting the image of the country. Therefore, it reflects about traditions of the country and its civilisation.

In brief, making a balance between both sides will assist the country from losing them in future. As a result, they might be a useful asset. Notably, it should not take care of one part, and neglect anothor part.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in addition, in brief, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.3376753507 276% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84660766962 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63962846028 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530973451327 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.1785537044 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.15 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.95 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121021601092 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0351950182915 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046260213461 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0763403076486 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350777033375 0.056905535591 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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