Some people think that man-made Zoos should not exist in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics: Some people think that man-made Zoos should not exist in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

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There are enormous number of people think that Zoos shoule be removed in 21st century. I disagree with this statement. I will explain in details as following why it shoud be there these kind of Zoos.

First of all, Zoos are the best plac that people go there. In addition, it's the place where people may go to refresh their mind and relieve soul. Furthermore, there are a lot of animal lovers like watching a real one to recognize it. Nowaday, we believe that families could take their children to Zoos for having fun while watching it in the real face, so that children could get known with species of animal.

However, we tend to believe that there are numeric channels in the modern age, it could be watched by TV, as it shows how animals live and cope in the ecosystem naturally. For example, there is national geogrphic channel, it represents all kind of animals about how they live all over the world. Although media covers these things, but it still a little bit different from watching in the real world. Also, it can be scanned view internet channels such as; UTube web, it has multi channels which it shows different types of animals. However, it will be more interested if it is being watched in the real face. Notably, we believe that there are some countries do not have real animals in their country, for this reason, it has been built Zoos for them, as it will be as a means for leisure time, where people can spend their free time in it. In addition, there will be advantages of being these Zoos available, therefore, people could take them out of isolation to public places to relax from the pressure of life, even they will have chance to know other new people and making a goid relationship.

In brief, although technologies have covered species of animals to be watched online or TV, but it still different from watching it on the real face. In addition, viewing it via this technology will be boring on daily basis.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...ails as following why it shoud be there these kind of Zoos. First of all, Zoos are the ...
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Line 3, column 73, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...plac that people go there. In addition, its the place where people may go to refres...
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Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ational geogrphic channel, it represents all kind of animals about how they live ...
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Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...dia covers these things, but it still a little bit different from watching in the real wor...
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Line 7, column 151, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...rent from watching it on the real face. In addition, viewing it via this technolog...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in brief, kind of, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59195402299 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3340622269 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522988505747 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4690003225 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.875 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104963968563 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0424298822314 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694268067409 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0800790061242 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690678165323 0.056905535591 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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