Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while others believe that children learn team work.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some aver that sport develops in our progeny a desire to compete. At the same time, there are those who state that our offspring are taught how to be team players. Below both prospects will be discussed in details and author’s opinion will be stated.
To begin with, for many people sport is embodiment of competition. In fact, almost all sports events are aimed to figure out who is the fastest, the strongest or the best at a particular activity. To illustrate, success of any country that takes part in Olympic Games is measured by a number of trophies and medals its athletes have won. Consequently, youngsters who play or do sports activities are faced with a necessity to achieve success via competition.
However, there are those who tend to believe that those children who participate to athletic activities rather learn how to work in a team. Of course, there are some games such as football and baseball that are played by teams that consist of several people and those young people who play those games are by default have to learn how to work together. Moreover, taking closer look at any sport would reveal that there is always a place for some team work. For instance, even such a highly individualistic activity as running assumes that the athletes exercise with other sportsmen and work with a coach that help him to be prepared for an impending competition. Thus, a sports person acquires knowledge how to be a part of a team.
Finally, it seems that any sport activity requires from the individuals who participate have a desire to compete and a skill of working in a team. Of course, different games demand a distinct proportion of both elements. For instance, box requires from the fighters to be more competitive while playing basketball call in for more team effort and less rivalry with each other.
To sum up, sport as an activity, by definition, requires from those who play to be competitive and at the same time to know how to be a team player. The proportions of these qualities will differ from sport to sport but both will be always present.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. No. of Words: 362 while No. of Different Words: 178, it means the essay is not developed efficiently, the fourth paragraph and fifth paragraph are somehow duplicated.
2. the essay is not developed exactly according to the topic. what does 'Finally,' mean here? according to the topic, it is better to have 4 paragraphs:
paragraph1: introduction
paragraph 2: sport teaches children how to compete, first, ....second...
paragraph 3: On the other hand, children learn team work. first,... second...
paragraph 4: in my opinion...learn both...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 362 350
No. of Characters: 1672 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.362 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.619 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.544 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.294 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.835 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 672, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...d for an impending competition. Thus, a sports person acquires knowledge how to be a p...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, however, if, look, moreover, so, thus, while, for instance, in fact, of course, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77624309392 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66754869905 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491712707182 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4910005407 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.705882353 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2941176471 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29411764706 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245877513231 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081840267957 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487811202641 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131440921265 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06422857688 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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