Write about the following topic:Discuss the advantages and disadvantages o f high school students having part-timejobs.Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your ownknowledge or experience.

Essay topics:

Write about the following topic:

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages o f high school students having part-time
jobs.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own
knowledge or experience.

Today, inflation has become a severe problem. For a middle-class family, monetary support is necessary. Here, part-time jobs can come out to be a beneficial job for students. It can help them to earn and spare money for their pocket money or tuition fees.

For a salaried person, living below poverty line, it is very difficult to feed each and every family member in a healthy manner. Students doing part time jobs can become a helping hand for their family members. These jobs are advantageous for small age students in various manners like it can help children to make savings in their younger ages which will definitely help them in the future. In younger age, enjoyment is also necessary like going on vacations etc. While having sufficient money, it would be easy for them to enjoy their vacations as well.

In addition to this, the job will help them in becoming more responsible. While having a thought of keeping a certain amount separately for savings, a student can learn the way of spending money in a logical manner. Using their money in household activities will also help them in understanding their responsibilities towards their family members.

However, money in early age can be disadvantageous too. Teenage is the age when maximum attention is required. If they have money and do not know the way of spending it then they can indulge in anti-social activities like having drugs etc. In teenage, misanthropic activities always lure towards themselves which can lead to dreadful life.

To conclude, learning professionalism in teenage can be beneficial. But, money as an output, can become an aid or an impediment at the same time because money is a good servant but a bad master.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a healthy manner" with adverb for "healthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...lt to feed each and every family member in a healthy manner. Students doing part time jobs can beco...
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Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ber in a healthy manner. Students doing part time jobs can become a helping hand for thei...
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Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a logical manner" with adverb for "logical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ent can learn the way of spending money in a logical manner. Using their money in household activit...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'in addition']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25078369906 0.247107183377 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.153605015674 0.155533422707 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0877742946708 0.0946595960268 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0407523510972 0.0501214627716 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0626959247649 0.0437548338989 143% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.115987460815 0.122226691241 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0470219435737 0.0403226058552 117% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.7977466856 2.80594681477 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.025078369906 0.0326793684256 77% => OK
Particles: 0.00313479623824 0.00163938923432 191% => OK
Determiners: 0.0783699059561 0.0861772015684 91% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0438871473354 0.021408717616 205% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00940438871473 0.011925033212 79% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1708.0 1933.35771543 88% => OK
No of words: 287.0 316.048096192 91% => OK
Chars per words: 5.9512195122 6.12580529183 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20517956788 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.334494773519 0.374742101984 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.275261324042 0.28420135186 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.170731707317 0.203846283523 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.11149825784 0.137316102897 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7977466856 2.80594681477 100% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.037074148 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564459930314 0.56093040696 101% => OK
Word variations: 58.7915690803 60.7387585426 97% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0891783567 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.9444444444 20.7743622355 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4840993609 49.517814964 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8888888889 127.492653851 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9444444444 20.7743622355 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.814263465372 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 43.4705768486 49.1944974215 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.60975609756 1.69124875643 95% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10541728212 0.332605444948 32% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0820497324836 0.102741220458 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0506421016033 0.0668466124924 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.490174543366 0.534860350844 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.139838853008 0.148594505496 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405252552039 0.134430193775 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320800694078 0.0742795772207 43% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.304511190096 0.324371583561 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0688344953311 0.0638462369009 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.070663248546 0.228012699653 31% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221580167767 0.058150111329 38% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.68436873747 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 5.90881763527 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.5751503006 194% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 16.0 10.4468937876 153% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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