Writing Task 2 an essay Many people believe that international sporting events can contribute to world peace while others argue otherwise Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Writing Task 2 (an essay)

Many people believe that international sporting events can contribute to world peace while others argue otherwise. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

International sporting events like world cup and Olympics reckoned not only as a medium of releasing patriotic emotions but also in averting increasing tension prevails at global level. Such events can unite all nations together and can be proven as a tool for peace maker if its executed properly.

Players from all countries gain attention and followers worldwide from their performances. And many sportsmen become role model of youth and kids who want to be like him/her and tread in that way to achieve that glory. Such sports celebrities assist international agencies to bring awareness towards global issues in people with leading solution together.

Moreover, sometimes enemy countries' sporting authority held events at neutral venues where players play together in mixed doubles in Tennis or in Badminton bring those nations people together; e.g., Israel and Palestine, India and Pakistan, North Korea and South Korea, their sports persons have perform a major role significantly to neutralise tension between respected countries.

However, only sports cannot bring world peace; it has to be jointly supported by movie celebrities through arranging cultural exchange programs. Same way, many professionals from different fields can give speeches in seminars representing their countries in conferences e.g., scientists, doctors, engineers, teachers etc. All these people can equally contribute just as sports in improvising peace in world.

Nevertheless, sports can ignite patriotic emotions emphatically more than other things. As people follow sports more and forget their worries, frets, issues for a while which give them some great moments to cheer or shed tears provided on performances of team. Brazil is one such country; after victory of football world cup victory positive change in country's development has been remarkable.

Thus, international sporting events should be held regularly with preserving decorum of national pride. Simultaneously, other celebrities of movies, cultural performers and professional field experts should also be hired. This will endorse of peace and enhance communication better at global level.

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Average: 9.5 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 297, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'performed'.
Suggestion: performed
... South Korea, their sports persons have perform a major role significantly to neutralis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, e.g., however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, while, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76489028213 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84098335218 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652037617555 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.0035801579 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.6 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215437964029 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729927840062 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525108022258 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109609624561 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431415824051 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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