Writing Task 2 (an essay)
Nowadays the level of violence is increasing in video games and some TV programs. What are the reasons behind this? What can be the the effects and solutions?
In today's world there is a tremendous increase in violence in video games and TV programs and there are many reasons behind this trend. This essay is delve into the reasons, effects and possible remedies for this phenomenon.
Due to materialism and advancement in technology people want all types of luxuries and if they are not able to achieve this by their regular income they are encourage to do crime and violence like robbery, murder etc. and this is the real face of today's society and this is the main reason for violence in video games and TV programs. Also, people invented great technology like VFA effect, 3D and 5D technology, Virtual Reality it's easy to develop the fictional video games and TV programs which includes violence.
Watching bloodshed, brutality, and assault on television negatively impacts the minds of people and specially children's mind and makes them irritated and hostile. Their behaviour towards the peer group and parents becomes extreme, and this severely impacts their ability to perform normal functions such as helping a fellow human. Ultimately, violence prevents them from becoming responsible and law-abiding citizens.
Watching violence in games and on television makes people believe that carrying out acts of aggression is not only easy but also acceptable to the society. This often motivates them to commit illegal activities such as physically hurt a classmate. These aggressive behaviours slowly strengthen and people carry out more heinous crimes such as grievous physical injury, rape, murder, theft, and drugs.
To protect children from violent content on television and video games, parents need to exercise strong control over what children watch. Moreover, government and regulators must ensure that no violence should be broadcast on television during the prime time when all family members, including children, watch television. Also, regulatory oversight should ensure that computer games do not have bloodshed and other aggressive acts.
To put in a nutshell, protecting adults and childrens from any adverse psychological influence is the duty of every individual as well as government. A mentally sound person becomes a responsible and economically productive citizen only if he is protected from physical violence in the media.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'encouraged'.
Suggestion: encouraged
...e this by their regular income they are encourage to do crime and violence like robbery, ...
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Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...their regular income they are encourage to do crime and violence like robbery, murder...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, then, well, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 10.4138276553 259% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45658263305 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73974783028 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602240896359 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8681940408 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.75 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3125 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217789930313 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715712502559 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848783126288 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109613285821 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100707421501 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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