• 20. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
In this day and age, almost all people have the same goal, to be more successful in their lives. A question which can be raised in this regard is how people can be more successful. A reoccurring standpoint states that with trying new things and take a risk in life, one can achieve more success, while others hold the opinion that people should do only things which they are good at them, and there is no need to do different things and take the risk. I subscribe to the latter opinion, and in the ensuing paragraphs, I will provide two reasons to illustrate my point of view.
To begin with, by taking risks, one can waste a great deal of time and energy if he or she makes a mistake. There is no shadow od doubt that time is gold in today’s modern world, and people effort to maximize the use of their time. Therefore, if people take a risk and they do not only waste their time but also they lose a lot of energy which they could use it in what they already have. My opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. Three years ago, I worked in a shop which sold women cloths. We had a good profit, but I wanted to try something new, so I added a book section in our store too. I spent a lot of money on buying some books, but eventually, no one bought books, and I wasted a lot of money on it. Hence, it is clear that by not taking the risk, one can save a great deal of time and energy and use those in a way that they are sure it can be more useful for them and can be more successful.
The second reason is that one can be more expert if he or she only focus and concentrate on what he or she is good at. Nowadays, more jobs are specialized, so if people want to have a good job, they should have great knowledge on it, and be skillful; thus they can compete with other people and get the job. But if one only wants to try new things to get more experience, in the end, they just will have some low-level knowledge about a various thing, but no deep knowledge about one thing, which is more important to have a job and get a promotion at it. For instance, after graduation from university, I really wanted to obtain a lot of experience, so I worked in different places to be more familiar in the work area. Although I met a lot of people and gained a lot of experience, after that, I could not find a suitable job with a high salary, because I was not specialized in a certain subject. Therefore, If one only concentrate on one thing, and try to be very good at it, she or he can be more successful in the future.
In conclusion, considering both the reasons mentioned above, I believe that in people want to be more successful in their lives, they should concentrate on what they are good at, and do not waste their time on new things. They can spend their time and energy on something more useful. Moreover, they can be more expert and specialized in that way, which is very important in today’s world; thus, they can be more successful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2424.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 574.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.22299651568 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42695120394 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.405923344948 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 778.5 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.5142006515 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.428571429 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209164907709 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070333526337 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905454018648 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161233842718 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606116929373 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.49 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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