Agree or disagree Some people believe that it is a good idea to use cameras to watch and record people’s activities in public so that safety can be increased; others think it has too many negative consequences and should not be used.
On 1984, George Orwell published one of the classic literary works “1984,” delineating an utopian and totalitarian society where surveillance cameras were everywhere. The entire life of the protagonist, Winston Smith, was recorded anytime and anywhere by the cameras. What was every horrifying was that even his inner thoughts were documented and used as a piece of evidence that substantiated that Winston had the thought of overthrowing the Big Brother, the ruling party, which used this method to prosecute Smith. Although 1984 is a fabricated fiction, the content of it has provoked many discussions on the use of cameras in public. While many may fear that the installation of cameras in public may incur many negative consequences,
To begin with, the installation of cameras in public can help forestall crimes. Since those attempting crimes are less likely to commit ones if they know that they will get caught on cameras and arrested later. To exemplify this, the government of Japan spent about five million dollars installing surveillance cameras in public space, such as restaurant, department stores, and apartment complex. Prior to the installation, Japan witnessed an increase in public vandalism and plunder, where Japanese people shopping in department stores constantly fearing being robbed or some historical sites were susceptible to visitors’ painting or drawing. However, after Japanese government employed thousands of cameras to help control these egregious behaviors, the episodes of old temples in Kyoto being vandalized or of pedestrians shopping at the downtown Tokyo have been reported much less. The cameras have indeed fulfilled their purposes of scaring off those potential thieves, burglars, robbers, and vandalists. Rarely will anyone attempt to engage in criminal activities when they know their actions are being recorded on cameras.
Furthermore, cameras in public can help solve crimes much more easily and rapidly. Police can zoom in the surveillance footage, which can help reveal the criminal’s identity fairly readily. We have often heard that some burglars or robbers are vindicated from being charged because there are no concrete proofs, such as witnesses or video footages to validate that they indeed commit the crime. However, with the aid of cameras in public, the conundrum can be solved. For instance, if a crime were conducted in a pitch-dark night, where no one was aware of and if there were a surveillance camera or many of them for documentation, it would definitely facilitate police investigation. The video footage could therefore serve as a robust piece of evidence when the suspect was being charged. These cameras can play an important role in solving crimes.
Irrefutably, some dissidents may disavow my argument that surveillance cameras in public will certainly intrude upon people’s privacy and will be a huge financial burden on the government. They may argue that when people go to public restrooms, the most private behavior of theirs would be recorded, which is deemed impertinent. Besides, governments can better budget their expenditure on other kinds of public service, such as health care, compulsory education, nursing, and the like. However, have these people forgotten that if people are safe and sound, they need not go to the hospital since there’ll be fewer trying to hurt and rob them? have they not realized that cameras in public are free from being invasive on people’s privacy? Surveillance cameras in public by their nature are meant to be positioned in public, where privacy of individuals would rarely exist. Therefore, their argument about installing cameras in public would be untenable. Instead, having cameras in public can ensure residents’ safety. After all, the Big Brother will be watching out for you, instead of watching you.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, after all, as to, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3272.0 1977.66487455 165% => OK
No of words: 601.0 407.700716846 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44425956739 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95129289623 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92752310919 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 322.0 212.727598566 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535773710483 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 1035.0 618.680645161 167% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5205329479 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.185185185 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2592592593 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.51851851852 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.85842293907 363% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307855402052 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927459375099 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522567677832 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187176383192 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636111462334 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 181.0 86.8835125448 208% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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