Are government doing good in educating people to pay attention to the importance of the food nutrition and healthy eating

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Are government doing good in educating people to pay attention to the importance of the food nutrition and healthy eating?

It is imperative for any society to have healthy people, and governments play a vital role in this regard. One of the most important responsibilities of every government is educating people to eat healthily. While some think that authorities perform in a satisfactory way, in my opinion, they do not perform successfully, and they should try to reform some policies. I will state my explanations in the following paragraphs.
First of all, people’s state of health is convincing evidence that the government is not effectively informing them about the importance of what they eat. The number of individuals catching serious diseases is increasing. According to nutrient experts, many of these diseases are caused by their eating habits and are often associated with vitamin and mineral deficiencies. Diabetes, the types of cancers, high blood pressure, and obesity are examples of illnesses that people are suffering from them due to the fact that they do not eat right. The signs of malnutrition are on the increase. If the government is enlightening people on having a healthy diet, then why are these harmful effects ever-increasing?
To add, these days, the government not only does not educate people in following a good and balanced diet, but it also theoretically and practically encourages them to eat unhealthily. To be more specific, the mass media is a powerful tool that can be used in order to teach people what principles should be noticed for making healthier food choices. Although the television set is still the most common media among families, the government exploit it to gain more financial profits instead of informing people. A big part of food advertisements is allocated to junk food, canned food, and frozen food, which are not nourishing and lead to a wide variety of diseases. In addition, students in schools are widely exposed to unhealthy foods. Therefore, the mainstream media are trying to attract people to poor nutrition, and unhealthy food is available easily for them.
In conclusion, the government is putting poor performance in training people to eat superfoods because it does not provide correct information about the right way of eating. Besides, various fast food and junk food are easily accessible to people. The development and increase of different types of diseases caused by eating habits are evidence of the fact that this judgment would be true.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 251, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a satisfactory way" with adverb for "satisfactory"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ile some think that authorities perform in a satisfactory way, in my opinion, they do not perform suc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, still, then, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2025.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20565552699 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99419766088 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547557840617 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2612369915 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.578947368 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327485842335 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862491273365 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770221308488 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186165362437 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216385324197 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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