Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past
Some people think that people today’s are happier than people in the past. They think that people today have more advanced lives. People believe that the technology and the improvement in lives are the sources of happiness. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that people in the past were happier than people today. The basis of my opinion is social, financial and personal.
From the social perspective, people in the past were more socially active. . For instance people life was much simpler then people life today’s. people in the past did not have to much work to do. They did not have today’s advanced life. Mom responsibilities were to take care of her children and her home. Dad responsibilities were to work and get some to live a happy life with his family. On the other hand parents today’s life are completely different. Mom and dad are working both to get more money. They put the kids in day care from a very little age. In the past people lives were happier and simpler than people today’s.
Financially, people today’s are seeking for collecting more money even if that will affect the quality of their lives. Today’s people the important role in their lives is working and money. Family and happiness in life are the last things they are looking for. For example, with the arrival of technology and the improvement in the life style of the people, all the people around the world are seeking fro buying fancy home, expensive car and so on. Hence, the lives attract people to work more and more to gain enough money to satisfy their need. But unfortunately people enter the cycle of working and searching for money and they forget hoe to enjoy their life and to be happy.
In conclusion, for the reasons I stated above I think that people in the past were happier than people of todays. Lives were simpler. People main purpose in life was just to live a happy life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, so, then, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82991202346 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58522032176 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439882697947 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2862974811 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.88 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.64 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339283235103 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121037401993 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967403381722 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255473949305 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381845067103 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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