changeing culture
A culture refers to beliefs, customs, society, traditions, ceremonies, dance, literature, music, food, habits, language and all activities that a specified group of people are identified by them. There is alarming because of globalization. In fact, our culture is under threat and our sense of identity is affected. in my view, what`s interesting is that people constantly embrace the other culture over time.
Ample evidences that globalization is leading to a loss of local identity such as; first Westernization of culture: new ideas, new culture appeal people extremely, so it causes people neglect their traditions, customs, dance and so on. E.g. nowadays couples would prefer to have bridesmaids and groomsmen in wedding nevertheless Iranian haven't had them in their wedding traditions. Second, Internet: it accelerates culture changings because people can see differences easily and people minds can be affected unconsciously by that. Third, chain restaurants: in fact, some chain restaurants like Mac Donald has a lot of branches in the whole of the world as we know abundance of people who love Mac Donald foods and prefer them. International celebrations, music, movies and etc. change people perspectives and life styles.
In my view, government and grass-roots organizations can help to grantee the protections of cultures. For example, teaching endangered language in elementary schools or Providing interesting TV shows to revive local traditions. Using the best chiefs to cook traditional foods to encourage young people for eating and cooking. Finally, people especially young people can be known their culture at least by these ways.
In summary, cultures are changing due to westernization, internet, chain restaurants, movies and so on. In fact, people`s mind are changing because of globalization, so they are embracing new foreign ideas. Consequently, we are in danger of losing our identify.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, e.g., finally, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, third, at least, for example, in fact, in summary, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 293.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58361774744 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16891946524 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61433447099 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.606614553 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2352941176 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2352941176 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244842710028 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803348557489 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928523538126 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165259936469 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768425185424 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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