A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (ages14-18) improve their teaching. It is considering two plans:
1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how to teach effectively, and they will then come back to their schools and provide that training for other teachers in school.
2. Provide additional training in teaching effectively for high school teachers, using online material that each teacher will study individually.
Although some people adamantly claim that additional training should be available for all the high school teachers, others take an opposite point of view toward this issue. Although some may remain nuetral believing that a myriad of factors should be considered to prove what idea leads to more success. Personally, I am of the opinion that training a group of superior teachers would be more effective and help more achieving the goal of improving teaching methods in the high schools. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, presence of an expert is so crucial for this plan. Interacting with a professional educator, high school teachers could ask their questions frequently and solve their comon problems easily. For example, my mother had the same situation. She was a teacher in the most famous high school in our city, tehran, for 20 years. The ministry of education in my country tried to enhance the teaching circumstances in high schools so all the superb teachers, including my mother, were selected to participate in this training where a group of professional educator were invited from Germany to explain the most effective method in the world which could be used in Tehran’s high schools. Fortunately, this project was so successful since this teachers asked all of their questions and could find a comprehensive answers for them. When all these teachers came back to their cities, they described all of their experiences for other teachers by some presentations and sessions. Luckily, after that, we had a better teching setting the high schools.
Second, congregating a group of teachers could be beneficial as well. The teachers who participate in this project could exchange their idea and discuss about their different situations in different schools. As I mentioned before, in the trainig which my other had participated, there were different teachers from all over the country. They could discuss about their difficulties in that session and learned from each other.
All in all, considering the aim of this plan which is enhancing the teaching conditions in high schools and all the aforementioned arguments, one can draw the conclusion that instructing top teachers who had an excellent performance in their class would be a better idea. Not only educating by an expert could have more effectiveness, but also these teachers could exchange their ideas and benefit from their experiences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...posite point of view toward this issue. Although some may remain nuetral believing that ...
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Line 2, column 747, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...y, this project was so successful since this teachers asked all of their questions a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, so, well, for example, i feel, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17705735661 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83622835249 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518703241895 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.6119274999 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.333333333 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274032815977 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934407136392 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463307690877 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175691928138 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417018002151 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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