A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose?

Since the dawn of civilization, the art is played a critical role in each society. Some people believe that there is no different between individuals and animals without the art. But how much is important the art without people. There is a important discussion todays. Some people say that people should allocate more money to the nature protection project than the arts. Some others take a radically different standpoint and Art has importantace as nature. I am with the former one and the line will shed light on my viewpoint.

First of all, the first reasons which comes to my mind is that depriving of the natural resourse. Due to advance in technologies, Production system has skyroceketed compared to last decades. this lead the need of more workforce then human population have increased. They consumed more and need more resources As a result of this, we use up the natural resources. There will be worst if we do not protect them and set up new protection rules.

Secondly, the importance of loosing natural resorces, It is important to understand that human health is in danger due to air pollution. Acording to the a reaserch study which conduct by repoutable scientists at MIT, half of the world's population lives in urban areas. Most of them have illness due to unquality air. Even thought this statistic, people who lives in big cities have been steadily increasing. If companies should the environment, It will be more useful than the arts.

Last of all, there are another advantages to saving nature. The productivity and creativity might be increase with it and maybe there might be allocate more money for the arts in future. People can able to have more interets to the arts if companies protect the nature.

In conlusion, there are numerous reasons which can be persuasive enough to corroborate my view. Having analyzed the reason, one can conlude that art is nothing without us. If you want to protect the art protect human being. People can not live without the arts.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88200589971 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67579753491 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536873156342 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.2471890029 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.9583333333 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.125 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08333333333 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193592417272 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518757547991 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623688914146 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103704804548 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031177991019 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.43 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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