Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
It is critically important to maintain a relationship with friends who is ingenious and helpful. Personally, I believe that continuing a relationship with an old friend is less important in a person's life than making swiftly new friends. I feel this way because of two reasons which I explore in the following essay.
First of all, having the quality of making a friend can help an individual to stay happy. Nowadays, people need to change their location for a better job, education, etc. If we make new friends instantly at that moment, it gives us good engagement in a strange place without feeling loner and isolated. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. A few years ago, when I was employed in the food factory as a sales representative, I had to travel frequently to different places and meeting different people from different perspectives. However, I utilized this challenge as the opportunity and quickly fused with the people interest. That attitude helped a lot to get a company in a peculiar atmosphere. Had I never been so interactive with the person, I would end up staying in the hotel room feeling bored.
Apart from getting a good company in the novel environment, these skills may assist you to meet the important people who can help in your career. Unless getting more interaction, there will be less chance of getting exposure for your career. For example; during my work time in the food industry, I was unhappy because of my salary. Despite I had been employed for five years, I still stuck in the same salary range. While during one meeting in Mumbai, I was accidentally meet the regional chairmen of the liquor. After our conversation, he realized that I was unsatisfied with my job and offered me position in his company with a handsome salary.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that being a cosmopolitan in nature and interactive is advantagous for the person. This is because person can get easily new opportunities and need not feel left even in a new environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...th an old friend is less important in a persons life than making swiftly new friends. I...
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Line 3, column 723, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'been'.
Suggestion: been never
...company in a peculiar atmosphere. Had I never been so interactive with the person, I would...
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Line 5, column 649, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in his company with a handsome salary. In conclusion, I strongly believe that b...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, still, while, apart from, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.875 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92553234837 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575581395349 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5525295796 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2631578947 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1052631579 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200323567024 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573274666304 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486984656683 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124842022598 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514852359066 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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