Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
private life is an important matter for everyone, especially who are more popular and well-known among people such as entertainers and athletes. people have different ideas about famous persons. some of them believe that they should be always accessible and their private life is not meaningful but some groups think that, like everybody around, these people are deserved a peaceful private life. when it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that renowned members of the society have the right of living privately. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, entertainers and athletes, unlike the appearance of their lavish lifestyle or their delightful status, are under great amount of pressures and tensions. they have a hectic daily schedule. Moreover, people are always around them and expect their popular celebrity to be happy and easygoing. For instance, Ronaldo is a very popular soccer player. it goes without saying that his perseverance is eye-catching and exemplary for everyone. Doing this great amount of workout every day will lead to a physical fatigue. Absolutely, such a person requires a means of escapism from difficulties. privacy and spending time with children and wife is the best way.
The second reason behind my standpoint is rooted in the fact that these people should be focused on their goals and their programs as well. privacy is the best opportunity to think about their career and setting plans. Needless to say, their accomplishment depends on their proper and predetermined plans. Furthermore, people's happiness relies on their success. For instance, when an Olympic athlete wins a gold medal, everyone feels pleasant and elated. As a result, famous people, especially athletes, deserve more privacy.
In brief, I believe that popular people such as entertainers and athletes deserve to possess more privacy. Since not only they can relieve their physical or mental stresses but also they will be able to set better plans for more accomplishment which cause people's happiness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, well, for instance, in brief, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28869047619 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70604789757 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.1242995934 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.619047619 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09523809524 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162399598423 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516823441463 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576553986369 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104767367413 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294602129659 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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