Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As society has changed in an unprecedented way, the issue of whether the support of arts sponsored by the governments should be more than athletics has been widely debated. Some people might think that every field deserve to be treated equally, while others believe the genre of arts are often neglected by the world. Due to my personal experience and life-observations, I firmly agree the statement listed in the question.

First of all, artists are easily been neglected or forgotten by the world because less people really understands their value. Unlike athletics, that most of the people can recognize them more. There's a vivid example. When watching television advertisements, the spokesperson of a great number of brands are all athletes. On the contrary, we merely see artists appearing on the screen. That is mainly because that common people recognize athletes more, so it influences the choice of spokesperson of the companies. Hence, the difference between the genre of arts and athletics is obvious and something should be done.

Secondly, there are large sport games happening in all over the world every single day. Besides, each game arena can contain thousands of spectators which can make a great fortune from their rather expensive tickets. On the other hand, artists can only hold exhibitions in galleries or museums where less people prefer to go. So, this has caused the result that arts definitely need more support from governments in order to keep artists continue creating marvelous work.

Last but not least, by sponsoring in support of arts can possibly benefit the beauty of cities. In other words, artists can help creating installation art to decorate streets and parks to make them more attractive to either tourists or even residents. To be more convincing, there is an example. Taichung city has recently gain a lot of spectacular structures that was delivered with the help of artists. They blend their interpretation of art into those buildings or parks to make them extremely artistic. Indeed, without the money given from the governments, the artists won't even have the chance to show their talent to the crowd.

In conclusion, due to the reasons mentioned above, governments should definitely pay more attention on arts and also spend more money to help it thrive. It is not to say that other opinions are out of merits. Moreover, I believe that my points of view are fully capable of supporting my position.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, first of all, in other words, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10421836228 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77543396586 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570719602978 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9279173188 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4347826087 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5217391304 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13043478261 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20984069329 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528627149831 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673561472569 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123539340943 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575545920629 0.0645574589148 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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