:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that with the dawn of human civilization, leadership plays a significant role. In this regard, distribution of resources to all the members of society is of paramount importance. Vividly, its not a piece of cake to reach a firm decision, but the goal should be the provision of resources that benefits in the long run and maintain the balance in society. There are different schools of thought among scholars. Where some reckon that government should spend their resources in support of Olympic teams. Others contemplate that authorities should focus on enhancing that arts profession. If I were asked, I would champion the notion of spending money in support of arts, In what follows, I will delve into most crucial reasons tos substantiate my viewpoint.
The first reason corroborating my stance is associated with the notion that improvement of art is extremely important for children development. To be more specific, when arts field is sponsored and flourished, it results in enhancement of the emerging generation's capabilities. It is axiomatic that arts stimulate the spatial orientation and enhance the mathematical skills. They learn to be creative and think out of the box. The increase in their mental abilities have innumerable advantages for them in their school life and future job. Not they learn to be creative, but arts would also teach them to reduce their anxiety and stress level. As a result, depression problem is eradicated from their personalities and they learn to see the positive aspects of life through Vibrant and colorful visual display of arts. As a case in mind, Last year, my city started a arts programme, i registered my son in that program. I see a dramatic change in my son"s mood and school performance after attending that program. My example clearly manifests the advantages.
The second exquisite rationale behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that there's no need to support the state Olympic b government. It is notable due to issue that their are private sectors who already sponsered the sports activities. Moreover, it is people's right to have an equal distribution of resources. When government spend all of its resources to sports, my individuals will be deprived of the financial aid. It is also crystal clear that is not the case with arts where every one would benefit the arts display. For instance, children can get to learn many thing from arts and adults and older can go to the arts exhibitions and cherish the displays. In my perspective, art is never monotonous and its display provide thrill to everyone.
BY perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that although spending on state-sponsored olypmic is the desire of many, the benefit of spending on arts outweighs the resources consumption on Olympics. For the sake of brevity, Few points are worth reiterating. First, spending on arts has a myriad of advantages for children. Second, State-sponsored Olympic teams can is not a necessary element. As for writer opinion, I will urge authorities to provide incentives for arts flourishment. By doing so, they will establish the foundation of successful society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, as for, for instance, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2634.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10465116279 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97910516835 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538759689922 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 810.0 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3235157239 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.03333333333 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199977814518 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480370187713 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534916983205 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12582722155 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404890469771 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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