Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
This question represents the arbitrary choice regarding governmental funding. Some people assert that the government should give more financial support to the arts while others claim that more funding should be provided to athletics. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that more money should be spent on governmental support of the arts due to their importance.
First of all, art can be educational since works of art often reflect the social situation when it was created. To be more specific, some of the paintings illustrate what was happening during the period. That is, those works can be considered a record of history that people can learn from. Take the painting of the French revolution for example. When citizens see this painting, they can know more about the revolution instead of just learning by text.
In addition, art can strengthen religious beliefs and make people become stable. To delineate, although people who have religious beliefs have had read bibble and other words related to the religion, it is much more effective to show a painting or statue about the religion to emphasize the sanctity of their faith. For example, people can notice how scared the god is from the structure of the painting. Thus, with those arts, people's faith would be strengthened.
Last but not least, the number of athletics such as Olympic teams is very few. Compare to the number of athletes who benefit from government support, the number of people who are affected by the arts is much more tremendous. Therefore, in order to benefit more people, the government should give more financial support to the arts.
What can be concluded from the aforementioned reasons and examples, thus, is that I totally agree that the arts should receive much more money from the government than athletics do since the arts are more important and can influent people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...en it was created. To be more specific, some of the paintings illustrate what was happening...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00638977636 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62171675209 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533546325879 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4205016824 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9375 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5625 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233983868019 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772464527008 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081015759844 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1490119521 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.09656035603 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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