Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Without any shade of doubt, providing suitable opportunities and platforms to the flourishment of potential talents is one of the substantial obligations of any government. Art and sport are the two major measures to attain this important goal. While many policymakers and practitioners hold the opinion that governments should allocate more funds in support of the arts than in support of some states- sponsored Olympic teams others, stand on the other side of the continuum, believing that athletics are in more priority compared to the art. As far as I am concerned, governments should prioritize athletics and spend more money to support sports teams. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
The first exquisite point should be mentioned is the amplifying of the national alliance and provoking a sense of pride in society. To be more specific, achieving glorious victories in international rivalries not only project the power of governments in the right organization and efficient exploitation of the potential talents but also injects the massive surge of happiness, prejudice, confident, and expectancy in society especially among young people. Besides, attaining salient conquest by athletics and sports teams in great international arenas brings enormous communal values to talk about that and be more proud which indeed promotes the sense of national unity and cohesion among the different spectrum of society. Now, they have a worthwhile achievement that they can boast to it in front of the other countries.
Another reason drives me to indicate is that nowadays, the economical facet of sport as an independent industry is not concealed to no one, so considering precedence in devoting more foundation to athletics and championship sport than the artist is a choice that its merits outweigh its drawbacks. To put this in the more vivid picture, the sports industry due to having the immense power of popularity and support by the audience in his back is a remarkable market for a safe and reliable enterprise which has the sooner return of capital more than the anticipation, as the prominent vantage. For instance, selling the broadcasting right of competitions, selling the tickets, commercial advertisements which exhibits during matches performing or at the around of play-ground are only the small portion of financial advantages that makes any government more persuaded to allocate further monetary support on states teams and the athletics much more deserved to have the attention.
Judging from what I have mentioned above, I should reinforce my perspective that devoting more monetary support to athletics more than artists not only strengthen the sense of national pride, correlation, happiness, and hope but also it could have a great economic and financial incomes to the governments and his people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, then, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40178571429 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03734200059 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540178571429 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 760.5 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.28979724 48.9658058833 219% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 186.153846154 100.406767564 185% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.4615384615 20.6045352989 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282745100591 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977993360203 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116047468318 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175886792179 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106077289298 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.2 11.7677419355 180% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.51 58.1214874552 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.01818996416 126% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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