Do you agree or disagree with the following statement If people have the opportunity to get a secure job they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.

It goes without saying that in this competitive world where we live, people are struggling with various problems and have to work in order to improve the quality of their lives. In this regard, some people believe that they choose a secure job whether they like it or no, others hold the opposite view. Personally, I firmly concur with the former group. To substantiate my point of view, two significant reasons are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, these days, living expenses are increasing so that people have to work that is opened. To clarify, in this world, people’s needs are increasing, and most of them are extremely expensive. Therefore, people have to make much money to pay cash to buy what they want. As a result, individuals choose any job that is available to them. It is no matter they will satisfy with this job, and money is the only purpose. For example, my cousin is a tailer. He tells me that he wanted to be an accountant and thought this work would satisfy him. However, he had to be tailer because of his family expenditure.
Secondly, people maybe do not know of which job really can satisfy them, so they probably are misled. To specific, some persons always think that their dream job is only work in which they will become successful and satisfied. So, they persist in finding that work rather than use available careers, and after a while, when they cannot flourish in the desired career, they go back and take another job and find this job as true love. For instance, I liked painting as a job and tried hard to be a famous painter, but I couldn’t. Then, I had to work as a designer, and now I love my job.
In conclusion, taking two reasons mentioned into account, I strongly believe that people do work any job even they do not like it. This is because not only do living expenses are increasing, but also individuals sometimes are misled about their true love job.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 102, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hat people have to work that is opened. To clarify, in this world, people’s needs ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61224489796 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48416005476 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551020408163 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2348855882 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2631578947 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0526315789 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312544740383 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932018302779 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050921242476 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193761293645 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390451349878 0.0645574589148 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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