Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People always have two opposite opinions when they talk about the issue of whether we should get a secure job first then look for a dream job, or keep waiting for opportunity until we get a dream job. On one hand, some people claim that we should get a job first, then keep looking for others. On the other hand, some may argue that we should wait for the best. For me, I think I would buttress the side that we should get a secure job first, for the following reasons.
To begin with, it is understandable that some people would rather wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Since working is not an easy thing, whether a job would bring us happiness appears to be an important index when we are choosing them. Take my own experience as an example. When I was a student, I would always find a part-time job during summer and winter vacations. One time I could not find a satisfying job before the vacation started, so I had to choose whatever option that I have. In the end, I decided to work in a factory, which was really tough, stressful and did not pay well. I almost had depression during that summer vacation.
However, getting a secure job allows us to satisfy our basic financial needs. In this way, we can prevent ourselves from being broke and starving, so we have enough energy to keep fighting for our dream jobs. For example, I remember when I complained about my working experience in the factory to my parents. They told me that it is really hard to find a satisfying job during the first try, thus, I needed to learn how to earn the resources from a secure job and then use them to find a better position. After following what my parents told me, I did find a better job in the telecommunications company, without asking my family for any financial support.
Moreover, while working in a position that we do not like is discouraging, we can still earn experiences and skills from that job, which is helpful for us to find our dream job. For instance, what I learned from the factory job was that I had to be efficient. So I applied that into my latter jobs, and I've earned a lot of compliments from my new supervisors.
To conclude, despite working in a position that we do not like is tough, if we change our mindset, however, it actually let us become more competitive in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 578, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'telecommunications'' or 'telecommunication's'?
Suggestion: telecommunications'; telecommunication's
...told me, I did find a better job in the telecommunications company, without asking my family for a...
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Line 7, column 304, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...I applied that into my latter jobs, and Ive earned a lot of compliments from my new...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, still, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42757009346 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55655204927 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476635514019 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.973713739 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.75 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308223799314 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103613337442 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086453421185 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164703530129 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.083880562483 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.