Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of the doubt, having knoeledge in different subjects play a vital role in increasing our chance to find a suitable job. These days, finding a good jobs required a lot of skills and having knowledge is one of them. So, it matters that what we pick as our carreer. Many people contend that it is better to have broad kowledge of many academic subjects, while others assert being specislize in one subject is enough. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stnd to point. However, my personal experience ans actual observation of life had led me to agree that it is better to widen our knowledge in different subjects. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate py point.
The first and possibily the paramount consequential reason is that by broading our knowledge we can increase our chance to find a better job. These days, finding jobs is one of the crisis that people are faced. So, for wining job haunting contest we really need to have information in different subjects. Forexample, I remember when I was 15 during the summer I went to a summer camp, and I participated in different classes such as carpeting and designing and also I learned one software aboat making animation. That year, I learned these skills and I really think they were very helpful because by starting the school I took a part time job related to one of the skills that I had learne. As you can see, without learning those skills my chance to have a job was low. As a result, I realy think that enhancing our skills can be better than learning just one subject.
Another point springing to mind is that being expert in just one field and doing a repetitive action as a career for all of our life can be boring. Life is a long long journey and in different stages of our life there is a possibility that we have to do different things and there is no gaurantee that our ineterests ramain constant. So, I think for have a pleasant life we do not have to limit ourselves to do just one job and deprive our selves of the beauty of lofe and doing different things. For example, I have a friend named Suzan. She worked as a designer for a company for four years and she was a very confident and successful woman in her career, but suddenly she was intersted in writing. After that, she started to write a novel and guess what? Two years ago she finished her book and published it, and her book won the literature prize in our country, Iran. Now, she is a freelancer and works on different subjects that she loves. As aresult, I think doing different things and having knowledge in various fields can be better and in this situation we can experience different things.
To sum it all up, I believe we can widen our knowlege in different things to increase our chance to find a better job. Also, because having one job is boring by having different skills life can be very pleasant. I hope someday people can choose their career just for having e pleasant life and not for just money or other nonsense stuff.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 629, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...because by starting the school I took a part time job related to one of the skills that I...
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Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: long
...ll of our life can be boring. Life is a long long journey and in different stages of our ...
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Line 4, column 178, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'skills'' or 'skill's'?
Suggestion: skills'; skill's
...g one job is boring by having different skills life can be very pleasant. I hope somed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, so, while, for example, i think, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2492.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 553.0 407.700716846 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50632911392 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51442086632 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455696202532 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3242657305 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8461538462 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2692307692 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159343425294 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532828245609 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521226083247 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113623609331 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486179285262 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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